So I’m registered on the Rutgers Career Services website as a resource for students to contact if they have any questions about consulting. I typically receive one or two emails a semester from students with questions and am happy to talk to them through phone or email. However, I will not be responding to the following letter:
I was put in touch with you through the Rutgers Alumni database. I am a recent MBA graduate of Rutgers and will be relocating to Fairfield County, CT. I have interest in the Management Consulting industry and wanted your opinion of the field, your company, the compensation, and the type of work.
Any information you can provide is useful.
Let’s pick at some of the issues with this…
- No greeting. “Hi Mr. Rosenfeld” or “Dear Mr. Rosenfeld” would be nice, I’m not a robot. While this already put me on guard, if this was the only issue, I’d still setup some time to talk.
- The first three sentences start with “I”
- There is no “thank you” anywhere in the letter
- There is no “please” in the letter
- No acknowledgment that it will take some of my time to respond to the request
- He wants to know how much I make in an introductory letter
- “I was put in touch with you through the Rutgers Alumni database” just sounds awkward and robotic. “I found you through the Rutgers Alumni database” would sound more human. As a side note, I’m still not certain this is a real person because the email’s domain address forwards to another domain, so this can just be a robot spamming for information on consulting or just trying to find live email addresses.
Now I’m not that important of a person, I think this is just basic human courtesy. I could’ve sworn MBA programs had required business writing courses. Shouldn’t some sort of persuasion class taught this guy how to add value instead of steal value?
A humble student seeking my opinion and caring about what I say makes me want to help them. I gain value by feeling good about helping nice people. This guy is all “me me me”. I don’t want to help him. But I wanted to help people who may not know better, ergo this post.